Friday, May 11, 2012

Sue Profile 005: Atlantiana Loren

Atlantiana Rebekah Loren
She is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way of the Twilight fandom. She is the main character of the fanfic: Forbiden Fruit: the tempation of Edward Cullen. She also has multicolored hair and likes the same stuff that Ebony does, except that she's blonde (which ironically, Ebony hates) and tall (because it's very probable that Ebony is about Amy Lee's height, considering that Ebony said that people think she looks like Amy Lee.). Other than that, she seems to be the perfect substitute for Ebony if ever this character was placed in My Immortal.

Now, without further ado... (okay. You have to press the read more link if you haven't already.)

Basic Statistics

Name: Atlantiana Rebekah Loren (nicknames: Tiana or Tiaa)
Age: 16
Nationality: most likely American
Socioeconomic Level as a child: adopted by (most likely) rich foster parents
Socioeconomic Level as an adult: not yet adult
Hometown: Forks, Washington DC
Current Residence: Forks, Washington DC
Occupation: student
Income: n/a
Talents/Skills: singing, martial arts (kung fu, baby!)
Salary: n/a
Birth order: probably an only child?
Siblings (describe relationship): ?
Spouse (describe relationship): none
Children (describe relationship): none
Grandparents (describe relationship): ?
Grandchildren (describe relationship): none
Significant Others (describe relationship): Edward Cullen
Relationship skills: depends


Physical Characteristics:

Height: tall
Weight: thin (but not enough to be anorexic even if other people think so)
Race: American
Eye Color: forget-me-not sapphire blue, weird silver color like wet pools of noble moonlight in distant meadows (I drew her as she looked like in Chapter 1)
Hair Color: pale blonde with black, indigo, and magenta streaks, then pale blonde with purple streaks
Glasses or contact lenses?  contacts (Chapter 7)
Skin color: "lily white and pure as the winter snow in moonlight"
Shape of Face: probably a heart or oval shape? But I drew her with an oval shape to make her features (fentures) look more delicate, as she herself described.
Distinguishing features: big boobs (of all the Sues I drew, Jo Bekke looks like the only A-cup, just because I apparently forgot to put the shading around that area) that are so noticeable in front of her slender figure (which would be physically impossible. But if this happens in real life, then she'd have to crawl on all fours. Ah... Mary Sue! Oh well...)
How does he/she dress? skimpy, often shows her bra (see artwork. I did my best to tone it down though by making it look like she's wearing a black singlet under a fishnet tank top. Well, I did learn a thing or two about fashion from Mary Sue clothing descriptions.)
Mannerisms: I think she likes to get naked A LOT (although she denies it). Every chapter of this fanfic has at least one nude (or undies) scene of her. No wonder everyone else thinks she has the boobs of a pron star. Good thing the author knows to give this an M rating. One Less Lonely Gurl seems like a very child-friendly story compared to this porn without plot. My Immortal also seems quite tame compared to this.
Habits: (smoking, drinking etc.) does drugs, smokes, drinks
Health: athletic
Hobbies: listening to cool music (which I actually agree is cool. Look at my profile and my favorite music.)
Favorite Sayings: "I'm not that pretty! I just want to be normal!"
Speech patterns: purple prose all the way, along with misspelled words and swearing
Disabilities: dyslexia
Style (Elegant, shabby etc.): skimpy!
Greatest flaw: What flaw? Maybe the fact that she does drugs, smokes, and drinks excessively? And acts like a skank?
Best quality: everything! Nah, not really.


Intellectual/Mental/Personality Attributes and Attitudes

Educational Background: high school
Intelligence Level: probably quite smart?
Any Mental Illnesses? She's delusional!
Learning Experiences: what learning experiences?
Character's short-term goals in life: Edward Cullen
Character's long-term goals in life: Edward Cullen
How does Character see himself/herself? not that beautiful
How does Character believe he/she is perceived by others? a freak/porn star
How self-confident is the character? not very
Does the character seem ruled by emotion or logic or some combination thereof? fuck logic.
What would most embarrass this character? the fact that her uncle still has to babysit her (at least this is a sure answer unlike with all the previous Sues who will probably only get embarrassed because of their prejudice)


Emotional Characteristics

Strengths/Weaknesses:
-strengths: musical skills, super strength, magical powers, ability to understand pandas
-weaknesses: lacks self-confidence, gets raped a lot (wait a minute... if she has super strength and/or martial arts skills, why didn't she use them against her uncle the first time he raped her? Wait, so her uncle is super DUPER strong? She used them against Edward though. Oh, it was some guy named Eric. Not Edward. I only understood this after listening carefully to a dramatic reading. I read the story with the dramatic reader, which made it less jarring. Oh well, now my brain is full of fuck.)



Introvert or Extrovert? introvert
How does the character deal with anger? physical violence, shouting
With sadness? drugs...
With conflict? gimme drugs...
With change? depends what the change is.
With loss? gimme drugs!
What does the character want out of life? to be normal
What would the character like to change in his/her life? the fact that people think she's a freak
What motivates this character? Edward Cullen
What frightens this character? her uncle at first
What makes this character happy? Edward Cullen
Is the character judgmental of others? very
Is the character generous or stingy? generous with her own physical descriptions
Is the character generally polite or rude? mostly rude. (I haven't encountered a polite Mary Sue so far.)


Spiritual Characteristics

Does the character believe in God? Edward Cullen is her god!
What are the character's spiritual beliefs? Edward Cullen!
Is religion or spirituality a part of this character's life? Edward Cullen!
If so, what role does it play? Edward Cullen!


How the Character is Involved in the Story

Character's role in the novel (main character? hero? heroine? Romantic interest? etc.): Mary Sues are main characters, heroines, and romantic interests, sometimes becoming villains.
Scene where character first appears: Chapter 1

Relationships with other characters:
1. Edward: -- romantic interest
2. Jacob: -- other romantic interest. She takes the place of Bella's role here! (and so do all the other Mary Sues in other Twilight fan fictions! I can't believe I'm saying this, but, poor Edward and Jacob. They always get picked on by trashy skanks. Relationship advice: It's better to be forever alone like a boss than be with the wrong people who don't deserve your respect. Now, I'm not being sexist at all. In fact, I am a feminist dude and I advocate gender equality.) Oh, right. He attacked her. But I'm betting that he will become a love interest too should the story get updated again.
3. Uncle Larry: -- enemy, rapes her a lot
4. Snoofles: -- panda that she is friends with

You have another butt to kick, my friend! Tiaa's!
 How character is different at the end of the novel from when the novel began: I'm not exactly sure if the fanfic has ended yet. There's a cliffhanger in Chapter 8, and Becky hasn't updated ever since.

Additional Notes on This Character: 
Mary Sue Score: 209 points! (Although it would probably be higher...)

PS. I'm afraid this girl might be serious about the story. She makes a good point about anorexia, though. Sometimes, I feel ashamed to be a fan of the same bands she likes, except for MRC. It's MCR, dude! My Chemical Romance! But then again, these same bands saved my life.

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